Ah, that was great! Really sweet, and I really enjoyed reading it and yes I totally didn't wait until I'd finished my work shut up ¬_¬. I think this is a great handling of the AU - stylistically, the fairy-tale-esque diction of the narrative was very charming; the correspondences you chose work wonderfully (especially Klavier-as-prince, Daryan-as-knight and Maya-as-priestess, I think their roles suit them extremely well); and I really like how the relationship between Klavier and Daryan functions as a subversion of the standard fairy-tale romance - it's always the relationship between the prince and his knight, rather than his princess, that ends up with the most emotional depth, but always the princess he ends up with, and I admit I'm a sucker for fantasy stories that go against that and take a relationship of loyalty to the next level like FE9/10 what do you mean it's not canon?. I also think you've no need to worry about characterisation - it did feel weird at first to have K&D stripped of their familiar speech patterns, but like I said, I think their roles were closely enough matched to their canon characterisations to compensate for that. And your secondary characterisation is great - Maya and Edgeworth especially really rang true for me.
In short, great job, and congratulations again on finishing it! I'm trying to get myself back into the habit of writing longer work, and it's horrendously difficult :s So I admire you very much for sticking with it :)
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Date: 2008-12-05 04:46 pm (UTC)what do you mean it's not canon?. I also think you've no need to worry about characterisation - it did feel weird at first to have K&D stripped of their familiar speech patterns, but like I said, I think their roles were closely enough matched to their canon characterisations to compensate for that. And your secondary characterisation is great - Maya and Edgeworth especially really rang true for me.In short, great job, and congratulations again on finishing it! I'm trying to get myself back into the habit of writing longer work, and it's horrendously difficult :s So I admire you very much for sticking with it :)